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The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.

The graph below shows the quantities of goods transported in the UK between 1974 and 2002 by four different modes of transport.
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The line graph illustrates the volumes of items transported in the UK from 1974 to 2002 by
road
, water, rail and
pipeline
.
Overall
,
road
 and water
transportation
 modes increased towards the end. Rail and
pipeline
 remained
same
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 except
pipeline
 experienced a sharp increase in the first decade. Regarding
road
, it fluctuated around 70
million
tonnes
 until 1982 and
then
 there was a gradual rise
of
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 goods
transportation
 from 70 to 95
million
tonnes
 between 1982 to 2002. In
case
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 of water,
it's
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its
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 volume rose to around 50 in 1982 from just a below of 40 in 1974,
then
 it remained almost
same
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the same
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untill
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until
 1998 and increased
shaprly
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sharply
 towards the end with just over 60
million
tonnes
 in 2002. Turning to rail,
this
transportation
 mode fluctuated around 40
million
tonnes
 over the period.
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 of
pipeline
 usage sharply increased from 5 to 21
million
tonnes
 between 1974 to 1982,
then
 it remained almost
same
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the same
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 until 2002. Interestingly,
road
 was the most popular mode of
transportation
 throughout the years,
in contrast
 to that,
pipeline
 was the least popular mode of carrying goods.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road, pipeline, transportation, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Transported goods
  • Quantities
  • Trends
  • Modes of transport
  • Rail
  • Road
  • Water
  • Pipeline
  • Fluctuations
  • Predominance
  • Economic influences
  • Societal changes
  • Technological advancements
  • Environmental impact
  • Growth
  • Steady increase/decrease
  • Comparison
  • Period (e.g., decade, years)
  • Examination
  • Implications
  • Analysis
  • Conclusion
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