Some people consider price as the most important thing to think about when buying products (such as cellphones) or services (medical treatments) do you agree or disagree?

For many consumers, especially those with limited financial resources,
price
is the number one factor when buying
product
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a product
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or
service
.
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can be depend when
its
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it
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come
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comes
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to
purchase of
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purchasing
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everyday items or frequently buying products,
such
as basic cellphones,Because
people
consider
about
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apply
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more features and
quality
buying
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when buying
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mobile
phone
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phones
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and
long lasting
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long-lasting
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period of phones.Talking about
service
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services
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people
are willing to pay during
emagency
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emergency
situation
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situations
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such
as medical treatment for better health.There
for
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apply
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I would like to mention I
will
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disagree
this
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with this
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satatement
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statement
,
people
are not only consider
price
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the price
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buying
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of buying
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product
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products
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and services but
also
other factors
such
as personal
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references
,
service
value,
Quality
long lasting period,
easy
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and easy
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purchasing methods.
While
price
is not important other factors can concern
about
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medical
service
with the
quality
of care and
service
they receive, as health and well-being.It will help them to grow more and attract the potential customer base
aswell
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as well
.since social media taking part in
human
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humans
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now days
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nowadays
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people
are more
concern
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concerned
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about
quality
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the quality
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of
service
and
product
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products
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their
for
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apply
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to arrange
better
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a better
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customer base sellers and
service
providers
giving
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give
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more attention to selling and providing services.
Aditionaly
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Additionally
Brand
loyality
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loyalty
effect
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affect
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consumer buying
behavior
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behaviour
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.Cheaper
product
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products
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may have different bad
aspect
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aspects
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such
as not
quality
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being quality
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enough,
no
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or no
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long term
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long-term
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use,But expensive
product
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products
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or
service
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services
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may bring more customer satisfaction
offer
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and offer
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greater value by lasting longer and performing better, ultimately saving money in the long run. buy increasing more customers
as well as
good
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a good
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reputation. In
conclusion
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conclusion,
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I would like to say that
price
is not
a
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the
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most important thing purchasing
product
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a product
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or
service
. Buyers have other priorities rather than
cost
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the cost
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of
product
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a product
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or
service
.
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