The chart below shows the percentage of people who ate five portions of fruits and vegetables per day in the UK from 2001 to 2008.
The bar chart given illustrates the
proportion
of folks who ate 5 times per day fruits and vegetables in the UK between 2001 and 2008.
Overall
, the
women are the leaders of the class as they dominated all over the years having the highest rankings and hitting Correct article usage
apply
its
peak in 2006. Correct pronoun usage
their
While
the proportion
of both men and children
stayed static from 2001 to 2003 and after that
the percentage started to increase. Add a comma
that,
Whereas
, the category of men hit their highest rankings between the years 2006 and 2007.
The proportion
of women who ate fruits and vegetables stayed high all over the period, however
, in 2006 the percentage of women who ate healthy
hit around 35% and after Change the adjective
healthily
that
the Add a comma
that,
proportion
fluctuated around 30% in 2008 , but still being in the first position. While
children
eat most vegetables and fruits in 2007 having over 25% and the same goes for the men category. In the
contrast, the Correct article usage
apply
proportion
of children
who ate healthy
between the years 2001, 2002 and respectively 2003 Change the word
healthily
stay
the same having over 10%, Wrong verb form
stayed
however
, in 2004 , the percentage of children
showed a significant rise to over 15%Submitted by annaungureanu794 on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words proportion, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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