The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred

The two graphs show the main sources of energy in the USA in the 1980s and the 1990s. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the changes which occurred
These two pie graphs illustrate the major sources of energy in the
year
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1980 and 1990 in
tha
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the
united
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United
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state
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. It
clear
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that there are
fifve
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fifteen
types of sources that are used .
According to
what is shown , we could say that oil is
tha
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the
main source
recheved
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received
almost half of the pie in 1980 and A third in 1990.
Moreover
, Natural gas makes up 26
percent
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per cent
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in 1980 similar
acount
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account
amount
to 1990 by 25
percent
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per cent
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.
Furthermore
, both Hydroelectric
power
and Nuclear
power
have
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a small percentage in 1980 each
is
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5% .
However
, Next to 1990 , the using of Hydroelectric
power
is
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still
fifve
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fifteen
percent
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per cent
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but
while
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Nuclear
power
get
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is
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higher by 10% .
Last
but not least , Coal
amount
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almost
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30 per cent in 1980.
Commimg
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Coming
to 1990 , the rate of using coal fall about i fifth of
tha
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the
pie .
To sum up
, we could say that the USA depends on oil as a main
sourse
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source
course
in the two
diffrent
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different
year
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years
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.
By contrast
, The lowest rate goes to Nuclear
pawer
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power
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in the 1980s and the 1990s .
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words power with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sources of energy
  • predominant
  • renewables
  • nuclear
  • significant increases
  • significant decreases
  • technological advancements
  • policy changes
  • trends
  • overall
  • preference
  • shifts
  • implications
  • future energy landscape
  • decades
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