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The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows the production levels of the main kinds of fuel in the UK between 1981 and 2000. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The graph illustrates
UK's
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the UK's
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production
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 levels of
petroleum
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, coal and natural gas between 1981 and 2000.
Overall
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,
petroleum
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 has the highest
production
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 between 1981 and 2000.
On the other hand
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, coal had the lowest
production
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 rate in 2000. In 1981,
petroleum
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 had the highest
production
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 level with approximately 90
million
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tonnes
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 generated.
Creation
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The creation
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 of
this
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 fuel has been steadily increasing,
however
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, there was a significant decrease in the
production
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 of
petroleum
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 around 1990.
After
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this
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 decline, manufacturing
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petroleum
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of petroleum
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 is steadily increasing with a peak of approximately 145
million
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tonnes
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 produced around 1999 and has remained the highest produced fuel in 2000. The creation of natural gas has been on a steady increase since 1981 with almost 40
million
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tonnes
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 and has peaked around 2000 with a little over 100
million
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tonnes
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 of oil produced.
On the contrary
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, coal
has
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had
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 80
million
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tonnes
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 manufactured in 1981 but had a sharp decline in
it
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its
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production
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 around 1982 with only less than 40
million
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tonnes
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 created.
After
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this
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 decline, it steadily
increasing
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increased
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 to 60
million
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tonnes
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 produced in 1986. It had
plateaud
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plateaued
plateau
 until 1989 when
production
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 slowly
decreases
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decreased
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 and around 2000's
it's
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its
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production
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 was at its lowest with only around 35
million
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tonnes
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 produced.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "after this".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words production, petroleum, million, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • production levels
  • fuel types
  • trend
  • fluctuating
  • dominant
  • period
  • rise
  • decline
  • context
  • spikes
  • drops
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