In the modern world it is possible to shop, work and communicate with people via the internet and live without any face-to-face contact with others. Is it a positive or negative development in your opinion?

In contemporary
time
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times
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,
people
tend to work, shop, and communicate with each other through social media platforms and do not have any direct contact in life.
While
this
trend has some positive
effects
, I believe that the negative
effects
of
this
trend are more significant. Despite many drawbacks that
internet
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the internet
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has brought for
people
, it may
also
bring some advantages.
Firstly
,
people
can take advantage of the
internet
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as it offers tremendous convenience. Individuals can
shopping
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shop
be shopping
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online, or talk about work through the screen without
go
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outside, or they can do some remote work from anywhere and make friends from different
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of the
global
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.
In addition
,
people
can save their money and
time
in transportation costs by shopping through media platforms and working online.
For instance
, customers just
surfing
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and choose what they want to buy and the shipper will deliver it to them. It not only brings convenience for
people
but
also
contributes to
protect
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the environment
from
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by
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reducing the
amount
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of vehicles moving on the road.
On the other hand
, I believe that the negative side of
this
trend will do more harm than good in
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long run. The lack of direct communication can prevent
people
from making meaningful relationships with others
around
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around them
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.
Furthermore
, if
people
especially teenagers rely and spend too much
time
on technology, it can cause them some problems related to mental illness.
For example
,
people
are attached to the
internet
all the
time
instead
of participating in activities with family and friends.
As a result
, the communication
skill
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skills
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of each individual will decrease and
do
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they will
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not have any
connections
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social connections
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with
social
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, which has a bad effect on mental health and well-being. In conclusion,
while
shopping, working and communicating with
people
via the
internet
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Internet
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without any face-to-face interactions have some positive
effects
, I believe that its negative
effects
are more important in
people
's lives. These disadvantages can mitigate the chance for
people
to strengthen
the
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their
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bond with others and
do
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not improve soft skills
such
as communication
skill
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skills
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.
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grammar
Ensure consistency in tenses and subject-verb agreement. For example, 'Individuals can shopping online' should be 'Individuals can shop online.'
sentence structure
Work on sentence structure to avoid run-on sentences and improve readability. For instance, 'Individuals can shop online...' should be a separate sentence for clarity.
structure
The essay has a clear introduction and conclusion, framing the argument well.
content
Good use of examples to support the main points, such as the convenience of online shopping.

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