IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The map below shows the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
#minutes #development #village #ryemouth #information #features #comparisons
The map gives information about changes
of
Change preposition
in
show examples
Ryemouth
 from 1995 to now.
Overall
,
Ryemouth
 did not
has experienced
Wrong verb form
experience
show examples
 significant differences. At first glance, we can say that the village had had a huge forest park and farmland previously,
whereas
, today
Ryemouth
 have a new tennis court and golf
area
instead
 of
thats
Correct your spelling
that
.
Also
 , it had
seaport
Correct article usage
a seaport
show examples
 in the year 1995 when it comes
to
Change preposition
apply
show examples
today it does not have a new venue
furthermore
,
fish
Correct article usage
a fish
show examples
 market and cafe
who
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
were built in 1995,
however
 they
was
Change the verb form
were
show examples
 removed
present
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
because
restaurant
Correct article usage
a restaurant
show examples
 and hotel were constructed.
Besides
, all housing
area
 was located
the
Change preposition
in the
show examples
 western of the
Ryemouth
 in 1995
also
 they
are
Unnecessary verb
apply
show examples
remaing
Correct your spelling
remain
 nowadays in the sample location.
Finally
, we can observe that local residents of
Ryemouth
 do not have sufficient green
area
Fix the agreement mistake
areas
show examples
 and they could find a park
are
Correct your spelling
area
show examples
 for their vehicles , today the
Ryemouth
 residents have a park
area
 which is located near the hotel.
Submitted by kickbox191 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
▼
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words ryemouth, area with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: