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You recently attended a meeting at a hotel. When you returned home, you found you had left some important papers at the hotel. Write a letter to the manager of the hotel. In your letter, say where you think you left the papers explain why they are so important tell the manager what you want him/her to do Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to inform you that I
have
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left some important papers at your hotel when I visited there to attend our company's conference. We had our company's meeting in the hotel conference room and because of a rush
to
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the
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home, I forgot my documents and as I remembered, I had left them on the main desk where we arranged a seat for our CEO. Because it is a financial budget of the company, it is very important and
need
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 to send it to the head office by tomorrow, so I request you to find those documents and inform me as soon as possible and please keep them with you at a safe place, I will come tomorrow morning and will get it. Looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully,
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task achievement
Pay attention to the clarity of your explanation. For instance, you could mention the specific date or time of the meeting for better context.
coherence cohesion
Work on varying your sentence structures to make the letter more engaging. For example, instead of starting several sentences with 'because' or 'so,' try using different conjunctions or sentence forms.
task achievement
Your letter has a clear and respectful tone suitable for a formal communication.
coherence cohesion
You have structured the letter well with an appropriate greeting and closing.
coherence cohesion
Each paragraph in your letter focuses on a single idea, which makes it easy to follow.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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