Your sister has been in the hosptial for a week .During this time, you have noticed the meals they are providing for her are very poor qulity . write an email to the hosptial manager and include the following things.

#sister #week #time #meals #qulity #email #manager

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Dear hospital manager, I am

writting

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writing

to express my concern

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have about the

food

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quality at your hospital. My sister has been in the hospital for a week, and the meals the nurses are feeding

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her

very

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are very

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unhealthy.

Frst

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First

of all, I observed your

food

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is very

hygenicall

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hygienically

. During the

last

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days

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,my sister suffered from very bad stomach pain and in that

stituation

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situation

your staff was providing semi form of

food

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to her. Your menu was the same for all patients.

Acording

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According

to me they should provide some liquid form of

food

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as well

should

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not fix

same

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menu because every patient has

diffrent

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different

kinds of

problem

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the problem

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acoording

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according

their

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problem need to be

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apply

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served that type of

food

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which is good for

patient’s

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the patient’s

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health. I hope you

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like my

suggestrion

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suggestion

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and you accept it Regards, Rajnish Kaur.

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Ensure that your writing covers all points with sufficient detail and examples to back up your concerns.

coherence cohesion

Organize your ideas in a clear structure, starting with an introduction, followed by body paragraphs each with a single main idea, and ending with a conclusion.

coherence cohesion

Revise your writing for grammatical accuracy and to reduce spelling errors.

task achievement

Your letter addresses the main concern, which is the poor quality of food provided to your sister in the hospital.

task achievement

You have provided some reasoning as to why the food quality is an issue, such as mentioning hygienic concerns and the need for liquid diets.

coherence cohesion

The tone of the letter is polite and conveys your concerns respectfully.

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Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

142 words

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Your sister has been in the hosptial for a week .During this time, you have noticed the meals they are providing for her are very poor qulity . write an email to the hosptial manager and include the following things.

Fully explain your ideas

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