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The diagrams show a small museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show a small museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied map demonstrates information about
a
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museum
 which is small and
also
 the atmosphere over a twenty-year period. A glance at the graph reveals that the whole area has experienced a slight amount of construction and urbanization in
particualr
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particular
 in
cottage
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 and
garden
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 over the whole year. In 1990,the section of store room,
garden
 and entrance was a bit as big as these regions in the northwest of the
museum
 in 2010.
Moreover
,
shop
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 part included only a third of the whole room in 1990.
However
,the measure of the shop became twice in the west of the path in 2010.
In addition
,there used to be a cottage in front of the main road in the southwest of the map in 1990.Whilst,
this
 cottage was demolished and replaced by a cafe between
shop
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the shop
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 and
main
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the main
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 road in 2010. It is interesting to note that,in the southeast of the
museum
,
garden
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the garden
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 and car park were separated in 1990.
While
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the
garden
 park was removed and another car park area was introduced in the east of the region in 2010.
Additionally
,the main road remained unchanged in the south of the
museum
 from 1990 to 2010.Another modest change is that in 1990,the path was slightly wider than in 2010 which was between two properties.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, garden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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