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The diagrams show a small museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams show a small museum and its surroundings in 1990 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied map demonstrates information about
a
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the
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museum
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 which is small and
also
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 the atmosphere over a twenty-year period. A glance at the graph reveals that the whole area has experienced a slight amount of construction and urbanization in
particualr
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particular
 in
cottage
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cottages
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 and
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garden
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gardens
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 over the whole year. In 1990,the section of store room,
garden
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 and entrance was a bit as big as these regions in the northwest of the
museum
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 in 2010.
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,
shop
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 part included only a third of the whole room in 1990.
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,the measure of the shop became twice in the west of the path in 2010.
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,there used to be a cottage in front of the main road in the southwest of the map in 1990.Whilst,
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 cottage was demolished and replaced by a cafe between
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the shop
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 and
main
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the main
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 road in 2010. It is interesting to note that,in the southeast of the
museum
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,
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garden
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the garden
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 and car park were separated in 1990.
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the
garden
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 park was removed and another car park area was introduced in the east of the region in 2010.
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,the main road remained unchanged in the south of the
museum
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 from 1990 to 2010.Another modest change is that in 1990,the path was slightly wider than in 2010 which was between two properties.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words museum, garden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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