The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The data based on the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 given certain periods between 1970 and 2000 was shown in those charts.

Overall

, it is clear from the graphs that, 1970 was the maximum

while

2000 was the minimum for males and females aged 60-64 in employment.

According to

the first table ,

Japan

had 85 % in 1970

while

jumped down to 74% in 2000.

Likewise

, the huge increase belonged to Belgium which started at 79% and dropped to 19% a given certain periods.

Also

, the number of guys aged 60-64 employed went down for Belgium, the USA,

Japan

and Australia between 1979 and 2000.

On the other hand

, ladies aged 60-64 in employed

Japan

was the highest

while

Belgium was the lowest. Australia started at 165 and jumped up to 18%.

However

Japan

began at 43% and fell down 40% which was still above all of them in a specific term.

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