The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.

The chart below shows the global sales of different kinds of digital games from 2000 to 2006.
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The given table compares the global sales of different types of digital
games
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between 2000 and 2006.
Overall
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, the different types of
games
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are increasing yearly. At
first,
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Handheld and Console
games
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are the most common kind of
games
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, but in the end, Online and Handheld
games
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are starting to increase. In 2000, there were only Handhelds and Console
games
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and they were selling for about 6 dollars and around 10 dough, respectively.
Then
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, Online
games
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were adding
this
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list at nearly 2 dollars in 2001. Regarding Mobile phone
games
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, it was
also
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added to
this
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list in 2002 for just over 3 cabbage and Online
games
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were
also
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the same with it. After 2004, compared to 2002 and 2003, sales of all of them almost doubled. Afterward, in 2005 and 2006 all of the types of
games
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were increasing compared to before.
In addition
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, the Handheld
games
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were always in first place in terms of sales at the beginning at almost 11 cabbage and at the ending at around 18 dough.
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