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The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives details of world electricity production by renewable sources in the four years between 2009 and 2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and making comparisons where relevant.
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The table presents information about the percentages of renewable
energy
 resources in the UK and the number of
workers
 in 2009. It appears that methods of
energy
 generation related to water are more effective
due to
 lower expenses. Hydropower,
in particular
, generated the greatest amount of
energy
 with the smallest number of employees,
while
 solar power produced the least amount of
energy
 with a larger workforce. In 2009, hydropower was responsible for 13.7% of the UK's renewable
energy
, employing only 1,013
workers
, making it the most efficient in terms of workforce utilization.
Nevertheless
, Wind
energy
also
 demonstrated efficiency, producing 10.2% of the renewable
energy
 with 1,198 employees.
In contrast
, solar
energy
, which employed the most significant number of
workers
 at 12,450, accounted for only 3.6% of the renewable
energy
.
Moreover
, Tidal and geothermal energies had similar contributions, with 6.8% and 6.9% respectively, but geothermal
energy
 required more
workers
 4,590 compared to tidal
energy
 2,034
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