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Technology like AI and Robotics are automating many human jobs and helping maximize company profits. However, this may result in a new wave of mass unemployment and the Government should step in to regulate these fields. Discuss both sides of this argument.

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Artificial Intelligence and
Robotics
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 have reduced manual
works
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 and
time consuming
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task
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became
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 easier than ever before by which few tech companies are growing financially strong.
due to
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this advancements
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 in
technology
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technology,
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 a fear of losing employment is worrying and few individuals believe that governments should act in stabilizing these advancements. On one side, by introducing AI and
Robotics
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, manual and human errors are avoided and the risk associated with it has reduced by which companies are seeing profits and growth in capital.
furthermore
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,
this
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 tech helps to save time and reduce stress on human jobs. for an example. Chat GPT has brought revolutionary change in the field of searching and sorting. earlier we
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 to search
solution
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 for
a problems
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problems
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 on
google
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Google
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, where
google
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 used to give information and feeds from various websites.
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, Chat GPT gives
most
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 suitable answer from billions of searches. which actually reduces human stress and
efforts
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. On the other side, a new fear of unemployment is unfolding, where few people would
loose
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 their jobs because of AI and
robotics
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. for
an
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apply
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example, recently Amazon has replaced thousands of employees with few
robotics
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 because
human
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humans
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take
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 more time to sort and assemble goods in
respected
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 places
where as
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 robots do it faster without errors.
however
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, a new job space has been created in
programming
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the programming
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, manufacturing and maintenance of bots.
instead
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 government should skill
individual
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individuals
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 in other relevant fields
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 of restricting
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development. In conclusion, AI and robots have made
humans life
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human lives
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 easy and
leading
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 to potential capital growth by avoiding
risk
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the risk
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 of failure.
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, it has created new jobs in the
respected
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 fields. I believe authorities should not restrict
the
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technological advancements.

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coherence cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion, but the ideas could be better organized and developed. It's important to ensure each paragraph focuses on one main idea that is clearly linked to the topic. Additionally, language clarity could be improved by avoiding minor grammatical errors and awkward phrasing.
task achievement
The task response addresses both sides of the argument and provides examples, but it could be more comprehensive. More detailed analysis and balanced discussion of both views would strengthen the essay. Ensure each point is thoroughly explained and supported with clear examples.
task achievement
The essay successfully discusses both sides of the argument and concludes with a personal opinion, showing an understanding of the task requirements.
coherence cohesion
There is a clear introduction that lays out the topic and a conclusion that summarizes the main points and provides a final stance.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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