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Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council.In your letter • give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre • explain why the sports and leisure Centre is important for the local community • describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

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Hello, dear sir. First of all, let me thank you for your hard work as the local council. All of the members of our neighbourhood really appreciate the best condition of our environment.
Moreover
, we believe that the low level of crime
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 the teens in our area
comparison
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 to other areas is the result of sports and leisure centre activity.
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, the summer and the vacation camps
get to
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 parents
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to continue working.
This
 centre is the most popular place in our neighbourhood, we
are spending
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 a lot of time in
gym
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the gym
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, enjoying evening classes for adults and for children. We think that closing the centre would cause
an
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issues for all citizens in all
ages
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 groups and may even cause the resettlement of the tenants.
Finally
, we beg you to think about it one more time and to try to find another solution for money. Thanks a lot. Your neighbours.
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task achievement
Provide more specific examples of how you and your family or friends use the centre to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Some sentences have minor grammatical errors. Review the letter for correct grammar and sentence structure.
coherence cohesion
Organize the letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single point to improve readability.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is respectful and appropriate for addressing a local council.
complete response
You have covered the main points asked in the prompt, such as how the centre is used and its importance to the community.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • leisure centre
  • foster social bonds
  • physical health
  • mental well-being
  • constructive activities
  • accessible
  • exercise
  • community spirit
  • public service
  • anti-social behavior
  • cost-saving measures
  • vital role
  • recreation
  • negative impact
  • forecast
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