Your local council is considering closing a sports and leisure centre that it runs, in order to save money. Write a letter to the local council.In your letter • give details of how you and your friends or family use the centre • explain why the sports and leisure Centre is important for the local community • describe the possible effects on local people if the centre closes

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Hello, dear sir. First of all, let me thank you for your hard work as the local council. All of the members of our neighbourhood really appreciate the best condition of our environment.

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, we believe that the low level of crime

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the teens in our area

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in comparison

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to other areas is the result of sports and leisure centre activity.

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, the summer and the vacation camps

get to

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give

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parents

opportunity

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the opportunity

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to continue working.

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centre is the most popular place in our neighbourhood, we

are spending

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a lot of time in

gym

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the gym

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, enjoying evening classes for adults and for children. We think that closing the centre would cause

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apply

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issues for all citizens in all

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groups and may even cause the resettlement of the tenants.

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, we beg you to think about it one more time and to try to find another solution for money. Thanks a lot. Your neighbours.

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Provide more specific examples of how you and your family or friends use the centre to strengthen your argument.

coherence cohesion

Some sentences have minor grammatical errors. Review the letter for correct grammar and sentence structure.

coherence cohesion

Organize the letter into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a single point to improve readability.

suitable writing tone

The tone of the letter is respectful and appropriate for addressing a local council.

complete response

You have covered the main points asked in the prompt, such as how the centre is used and its importance to the community.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

153 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

leisure centre
foster social bonds
physical health
mental well-being
constructive activities
accessible
exercise
community spirit
public service
anti-social behavior
cost-saving measures
vital role
recreation
negative impact
forecast

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