University
or
college
enrollment could be the ideal pathway for people to pursue their brilliant life, that
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by the faith that the more education you get the more opportunity you could gain.
On the contrary
, others
also
agree that having a job after high
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graduation is a better path to obtain more career experience.
Therefore
,
this
essay
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discuss both
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.
Studying in
university
or
college
could become a
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that would introduce the young generation
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working life.
University
or
college
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the
student
to learn the useful soft skills needed,
such
as leadership, teamwork, communication, and many others. The
student
will experience these in
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or in
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an organization
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they registered.
Moreover
, during
university
or
college
years, students likely have mentors who will guide them
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the years. The professors,
university
/
college
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, and seniors are expected to lead a positive pathway for the
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if they
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feeling lost.
This
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the years of learning about
in
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more inspiring and less horrifying.
Whereas
, people who tend to get hired straight after
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graduation would experience their
, without introduction.
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will demand them to quickly adapt to
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environment and learn many
as soon as possible.
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each person, the phase of learning time will be different,
hence
it is
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matter of
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.
Although
, these people could get a mentor
also
–more like a work adviser.
their direct supervisor or their senior colleague would gladly do so.
Nevertheless
,
this
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not guaranteed by the company
due to
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responsibility only administered
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resource party.
Consequently
, working right after school would be more challenging and isolated.
In spite of that,
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choosing to become
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student
or directly hired for
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after school could assure success path. It is true that
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directly into the
after school could be petrifying, but the value along the way could be more meaningful to learn. The same with studying
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university
, the path of learning would be
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slower compared to learning directly
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under
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.
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on one character, how
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responds
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around them and always striving to develop their skills. There
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no wrong or right in both ways, even
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persistent effort and never
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up faith would lead to success.