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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of visitors to different types of tourist locations in two years: 1981 and 1999 of the UK.

The pie chart illustrates the proportion of visitors to different types of tourist locations in two years: 1981 and 1999 of the UK.
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The pie chart illustrates the proportion of
visitors
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 to different types of tourist locations in
two
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 years: 1981 and 1999 of the UK.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the tourist attraction that attracts the most
visitors
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 are museums and Galleries in both
two
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 years.
Besides
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, wildlife
parks
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 and zoos are the least amazing locations. First of all, we can see that museums and Galleries, theme
parks
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 were
two
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 tourist attractions which had the most people visiting in both 1981 and 1999. Museums occupied about 48 percent of the number of
visitors
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 in 1981:
however
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, in 1999
this
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 location had less people than 1981 about 10%.
Besides
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, in theme
parks
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 were opposite, in 1999,
this
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 field had more
visitors
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 than about 5% compared with 1981. On the one hand,
two
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 domains occupied the lowest percentage in
two
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 years were Historic houses and wildlife
parks
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. In which, historic houses and monuments had the same percentage as 16 percent in both 1981 and 1999.
Nevertheless
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, in 1999, wildlife
parks
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 were the location that had the number of
visitors
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 higher than 1981 about 5%.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "besides".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, two, parks with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "illustrates" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "proportion" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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