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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reportung the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reportung the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph given illustrates data on coffee and tea in five Australian cities. The graph relates 20% to 70%.
Overall
, the
number
 of
cases
 in
Mlebourne
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Melbourne
 was more than the
number
 of figures in
Adeleaide
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Adelaide
.
According to
 the graph, it is noticeable that there is a
developmemt
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development
. It can be clearly seen that,
about
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 humans coffee and tea buying and drinking.The initial one to consider is that there was a rise to 64% in
Mlebourne
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Melbourne
.
Also
, the
number
 of
cases
 fell slightly to about 49% in
Adelalde
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Adelaide
 in
last
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 4 weeks.
In addition
, In recent years, the
number
 of
cases
 increased significantly to 63% in Hobart.
On the other hand
, there was a significant drop to 34% in Brisbane.
Furthmore
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Furthermore
, there was a
grow
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to
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 55% in Hobart. Regarding
to
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the given data, it is remarkable that there is a leap. The figures
of
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for
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cases
 in
Adeleaide
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Adelaide
was
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were
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 less than the
number
 of
cases
 in
Mlebourne
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Melbourne
.
Reference
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 to
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the represneted
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represneted
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represented
represent
 figures, it is significant that there is an
achievemnet
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achievement
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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