The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows consumers' average annual expenditure on cell phone, national and international fixed-line and services in America between 2001 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line illustrates customers’ average annual spend on smartphones, national and international
fixed-line
and
services
in America over a period of 9 years.
It is clear that
,
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Cell
phone
services
increased between 2001 and 2009.
By
contrast
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contrast,
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National
fixed-line
saw decreasing amount of spending.The international
fixed-line
services
remained relatively stable.
According to
the graph,
Cell
phone
service started at 200$
kept
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and kept
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this
growth trend by 2002 surpassed international
fixed-line
in 2006 maintained increasing exceed from National fixed line by 2010 reached over 700
USD
Conversely
, National
fixed-line
service was the main expenditure for users which was 700
USD
, but it ended at 400
USD
in 2010. The mean annual spending of international
fixed-line
services
was half that of
cell
phone
services
and remained at 300
USD
for the rest of the period. In 2006, both
cell
phone
services
and national
fixed-line
services
had the same amount of expense at 500
USD
. International
fixed-line
services
saw only a small rise to approximately 330
USD
by 2003,
then
dropped to 300
USD
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words fixed-line, services, cell, phone, usd with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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