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The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selectng and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the main reasons why agricultural land becomes less productive. The table shows how these causes affected three regions of the world during the 1990s. Summarise the information by selectng and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie chart compares data about the reasons why farmland does not have good yield;
furthermore
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, the table demonstrates how
this
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 matter influenced the 3 various districts of Earth during the 1990s.
Overall
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, the main reason which lost efficiency has been over-grazing;
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, North America was the best area where had less effect
instead
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 of other ones.
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 the pie graph,
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,
reason
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the reason
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 for which land
productive
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 was less was over-grazing by 35%;
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 the second
one
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 was
deforestation
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 by 30%, and the percentage of the fourth
one
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 which was Over-cultivation was roughly the same as the prior
one
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.
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, the
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one
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 was Others by 7 per cent. The table illustrates the region which had a massive injury from several
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 was Europe owing to the fact that it was 9.8, 7.7, and 5.5 per cent respectively for
deforestation
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, Over-cultivation,and over-grazing. Later Oceania, whose proportion was 10% less than the previous, had the second level, and in
this
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 area, the best reasons were over-grazing by 11.3% and
deforestation
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 by 1.7%.
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, was North America, which the most popular reason was in contracts to Oceania with 3.3%,
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, other ones were Overgrazing and
deforestation
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 with 1.5 and 0.2 per cent.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words one, deforestation with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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