There is a lot of pressure on young people today to succeed academically. As a result, some people believe that non-academic subjects, such as physical education and cookery, should be removed from the school syllabus so that children can concentrate on academic work. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Nowadays, societies

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academic success better than

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non-academic ones

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.

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that reason,

people

demand that non-academic related subjects

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for

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physical education, art, and cookery

to

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be erased from

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school's

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curriculum.

This

essay will discuss both views. Many communities believe that academic

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success

is what

matter

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,

therefore

, they are pressuring the young generation to

excellent

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in math,

physic

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physics

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, biology, and other similar subjects that

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the using of

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brain section. As for the reason

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this

, many believed if

people

succeed in those materials

then

the opportunity of many

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of jobs will open,

for instance

, office workers, doctors,

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, and many others. These

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of professions are the most possible options for job seekers

due to

their high demand by corporations.

On the other hand

, by learning non-academic courses

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will use their right brain which contains creativity, emotional ability, and perception. Creative type of professions

such

as

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,

model

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,

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and athlete

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athlete

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is more

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rare

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than the kind of

corporate's

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occupations.

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, only

people

which both really hard-working and gifted

that

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could be successful in

non-academic

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a non-academic

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related

career

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.

Hence

, if we talk about the students' development at school, non-academic courses should not cease to exist.

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must

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all the options open for children to grow, whether they will choose the path of

right brainers

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or

left brainers

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.

Additionally

, non-academic studies

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benefit

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for mental and physical health.

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, by studying physical

program

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, their body will sweat and their mind will be clearer.

Accordingly

, they will be more ready to face another class. In conclusion, it is true that succeeding in academic courses will help

people

to get an easier successful future,

nevertheless

, the value of learning non-academic programs at school

also

should not be removed. The room for

kids

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brain's

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enhancement must always be provided in both ways, academically and non-academically.