You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room. Write to the hotel management to complain. Include • Where you stayed • What the problems were • How they can fix your complaints
Dear Sir or Madam
I am writing to express my dismay at the service
my
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in my
room
.
I am
recently stayed at a hotel for Unnecessary verb
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conference
with my company and there were several problems Add an article
a conference
the conference
my
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with my
room
. The first thing I would like to draw your attention to is in
my Change preposition
that
room
don't
have WiFi for my work. Not only WiFi but in Change the verb form
doesn't
the
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room
don't have air
conditioner. It was unacceptable. I am disappointed because you going to cost your business.
I suggest Add an article
an air
you
that you set WiFi router and Air Conditioner in all rooms.
Yours faithfully,
Ibodullayev DiyorbekCorrect pronoun usage
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task response
Include more specific details about your stay, such as the name of the hotel and the dates of your stay.
task response
Add more details about the problems you encountered, including how they affected your stay.
coherence cohesion
Ensure each paragraph focuses on a single idea to improve clarity.
coherence cohesion
Use transitional phrases to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
general
Double-check the use of definite and indefinite articles to ensure grammatical accuracy.
task response
You have made a clear request for the hotel to address your concerns.
greeting and closing
Your greeting and closing statements are appropriately formal and respectful.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite