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You have bought a new camera but when you got it home you found it had some problems. You returned the camera and spoke to the company representative a week ago but the camera has still not been repaired. Write a letter to the company In your letter • Introduce yourself • Explain the situation • Say what action you would like the company to take

#camera #home #company #representative #week #situation #action
Dear sir or madam
Iʼm
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I
 writing about your
company
 for
a
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some problems. I
have
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bought
new
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camera
 from your
company
 but when
i
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 got home I found some problems. I returned the new
camera
 and spoke to the
company
 representative a week ago
however
 the
camera
 has still not been repaired. I was so angry about it. I really need
camera
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 right now because after three days I will take
trip
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a trip
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 and
i
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 need
good
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a good
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 quality
camera
.
Iʼm
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I
 not satisfied
about
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 your
company
. Because your
company
 makes me laugh. You sold me
camera
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a camera
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 that didn't work well before, and now you don't fix the
camera
 and return it. What can you think of
this
? I request the
company
 to repair and return my
camera
 to me as soon as possible. If not send me a new
camera
 with no problem.
Of
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 you don't fix the problem within a day, I will have to file a complaint against your
company
.
Your
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 faithfully Jasmina
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suitable writing tone
Ensure to maintain a consistent and polite tone throughout the letter. Using expressions like 'your company makes me laugh' can be perceived as unprofessional.
complete response
Include more specific details about the camera and the problems encountered. This provides clarity and helps convey the seriousness of the issue.
complete response
The letter efficiently introduces the purpose of the writing and the situation experienced.
greeting and closing
The closing of the letter is clear and makes a direct request for action.

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