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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree ot disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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 method to solve
increasing
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the increasing
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traffic
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 and
pollution
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problems
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 is by increasing the price of
petrol
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. I completely disagree with
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 statement because higher
petrol
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prices
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wont
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effect
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affect
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for
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those who are capable of affording their own vehicle and many
people
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 already
use
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vehicles
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 which run
by
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on
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 electricity.
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,
this
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 can be
affectively
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effectively
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 controlled by improving the
quality
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 of
public
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the public
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transport
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 system and
people
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 should be encouraged to
use
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non-enegry
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non-energy
 consuming
transport
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 methods for shorter
distance
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distances
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travels
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travel
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. Many
people
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 who own private
vehicles
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 are wealthy enough to afford the elevating
petrol
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prices
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. Since they prefer comfort over anything, they will always choose to
travel
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by
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on
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 their own. As
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a results
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results
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result
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, despite
of
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increased
petrol
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prices
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, the number of
vehicles
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 on the road won't be reduced
thus
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traffic
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 and
environmental
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environmentally
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 related
problems
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 won't be solved. Another situation is that many
people
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 already
use
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 electrical
vehicles
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 for the betterment of the environment and these
vehicles
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 do not consume
petrol
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.
Eventhough
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Even though
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 results in
less
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 pollutions rates, the
traffic
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problems
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 grow
continuesly
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continuously
.
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,
petrol
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prices
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 are much higher in the USA, yet, the
traffic
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problems
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 are not solved as many
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use
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who use
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electrical
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vehicles
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 are not affected
from
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by
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 increased
petrol
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prices
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. Improving public
transport
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 systems could be beneficial rather than
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increasing
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petrol
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prices
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.
This
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 is because
of
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many
people
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 choose to
travel
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by
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on
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 their own
due to
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lack
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the lack
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 of
quality
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in
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apply
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public
transport
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. These can be less comfortable
as well as
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 they do not work on time. For these reasons,
people
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 are forced to
travel
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 by their own
vehicles
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.
Thus
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, improving the
quality
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 of public
transport
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 systems will allow many
peple
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people
 to
travel
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 a once and it will aid in reducing
traffic
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 and
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pollution related
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pollution-related
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 matters.
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,
people
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 should be encouraged to
use
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non-energy consuming
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non-energy-consuming
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transport
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 methods for shorter distances.
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, in
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Netherlands
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Netherlands,
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 many
use
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 bikes for their daily travels and it
had
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 helped the country to reduce
traffic
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 and
pollution
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. In conclusion, I completely disagree with increasing
price
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the price
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 of
petrol
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 to control
traffic
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 and
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pollution related
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pollution-related
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 matters as it is not the best method because
people
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 who own
vehicles
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 have the capital to pay for
petrol
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 and many have already converted to
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use
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using
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electrical
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electric
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vehicles
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.
However
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,
this
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 can be
controled
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controlled
 by elevating the
quality
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 of public
transport
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 and by encouraging
people
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 to
use
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non-energy consuming
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non-energy-consuming
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 methods for
short distance
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short-distance
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travels
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travel
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