Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree ot disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?
Best
method to solve Add an article
The best
increasing
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the increasing
traffic
and pollution
problems
is by increasing the price of petrol
. I completely disagree with this
statement because higher petrol
prices
wont
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won't
effect
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affect
for
those who are capable of affording their own vehicle and many Change preposition
apply
people
already use
vehicles
which run by
electricity. Change preposition
on
However
, this
can be affectively
controlled by improving the Correct your spelling
effectively
quality
of public
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the public
transport
system and people
should be encouraged to use
non-enegry
consuming Correct your spelling
non-energy
transport
methods for shorter distance
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distances
travels
.
Many Fix the agreement mistake
travel
people
who own private vehicles
are wealthy enough to afford the elevating petrol
prices
. Since they prefer comfort over anything, they will always choose to travel
by
their own. As Change preposition
on
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a results
results
, despite Fix the agreement mistake
result
of
increased Change preposition
apply
petrol
prices
, the number of vehicles
on the road won't be reduced thus
traffic
and environmental
related Change the word
environmentally
problems
won't be solved. Another situation is that many people
already use
electrical vehicles
for the betterment of the environment and these vehicles
do not consume petrol
. Eventhough
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Even though
this
results in less
pollutions rates, the Change the quantifier
fewer
traffic
problems
grow continuesly
. Correct your spelling
continuously
For example
, petrol
prices
are much higher in the USA, yet, the traffic
problems
are not solved as many use
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who use
electrical
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electric
vehicles
are not affected from
increased Change preposition
by
petrol
prices
.
Improving public transport
systems could be beneficial rather than increased
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increasing
petrol
prices
. This
is because of
many Change preposition
apply
people
choose to travel
by
their own Change preposition
on
due to
lack
of Correct article usage
the lack
quality
in
public Change preposition
apply
transport
. These can be less comfortable as well as
they do not work on time. For these reasons, people
are forced to travel
by their own vehicles
. Thus
, improving the quality
of public transport
systems will allow many peple
to Correct your spelling
people
travel
a once and it will aid in reducing traffic
and pollution related
matters. Add a hyphen
pollution-related
Also
, people
should be encouraged to use
non-energy consuming
Add a hyphen
non-energy-consuming
transport
methods for shorter distances. For instance
, in Correct article usage
the Netherlands
Netherlands
many Add a comma
Netherlands,
use
bikes for their daily travels and it had
helped the country to reduce Wrong verb form
has
traffic
and pollution
.
In conclusion, I completely disagree with increasing price
of Correct article usage
the price
petrol
to control traffic
and pollution related
matters as it is not the best method because Add a hyphen
pollution-related
people
who own vehicles
have the capital to pay for petrol
and many have already converted to use
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using
electrical
Replace the word
electric
vehicles
. However
, this
can be controled
by elevating the Correct your spelling
controlled
quality
of public transport
and by encouraging people
to use
non-energy consuming
methods for Add a hyphen
non-energy-consuming
short distance
Add a hyphen
short-distance
travels
.Fix the agreement mistake
travel
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