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The plans below shows a harbour in 2000 and how it looks today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporitng the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The map displays the blueprint of Porth Harbour from the year 2000
along with
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 the outline of
todays
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today's
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 map.
Overall
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, the major changes that took place were the introduction of new buildings
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 as new Showers & toilets on the west side near the main
road
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,and
anew
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a new
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 Hotel which was built by the demolition of a disused Castle.
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, some minor changes
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 as the Car Park which was connected to the
Road
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was
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were
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 relocated and seen to be attached to the main
road
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. In today's year, multiple docks can be seen
nearby
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near
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 the Public beach,
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 increasing the number of passenger ferries,
moreover
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, the private beach located at the southern side of the map is assigned to an unknown hotel,
while
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 two have interchanged their location with each other i.e., the place to store fishing boats shifted to the Northern side in place of Marina and vice versa. A new parking site is
also
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 introduced in the current year attached to the main
road
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, increasing the parking capacity of the Porth Harbour.
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, the majority of the sites have remained unchanged through the years
such
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 as the Public and Private beaches located on the North Eastern and Southern sides.

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coherence cohesion
To improve logical structure, integrate a clearer organization. You might consider discussing one map fully before moving on to the other.
coherence cohesion
Include a more defined introduction and conclusion to create a cohesive essay structure.
task achievement
Expand on main points and provide clearer examples to enhance comprehension and detail.
task achievement
You have accurately identified the changes over time between the two maps.
task achievement
The descriptions of specific alterations, such as the addition of docks and the movement of facilities, are clear and relevant.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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