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The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the same park today. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given maps illustrate have plants of public
Use synonyms
park
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parks
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 has transformed between 1920 and today .
Overall
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, it is obvious that public
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park
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parks
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has
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have
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 undergone
a major alterations
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major alterations
a major alteration
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 during a period of time, becoming more crowded and
modernize
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 it
and
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apply
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less green space now. As for the general structure of
provided
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the provided
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 map in 1920, it was more green with a huge fountain in the middle part of the
park
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, followed
with
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by
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stage
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a stage
the stage
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 for musicians
in
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on
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 the left. In the left up and down corner of the map, there were seats and rose gardens.
Entrance
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Entrances
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also
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 were available in the north and south with
pond
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ponds
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 for water plants. Currently, there
was
Wrong verb form
are
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 so many changes in Grange
Park
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. Rose garden cycled with seats and
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an
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amphitheater
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amphitheatre
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for concerts take place of fountain and stage for musicians.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words park with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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