The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. 

Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table provides information about the
population
of
age
group
in New Zealand between 2011 to 2012.
Overall
,
In
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2011 shows an increase in all ages than 2012.
In addition
, the percentage of the changes for total ages is above 0.6%.
According to
data children under 15 were gently decreased from 2011 to 2012 around -0.2%.
On the other hand
, the
age
group
15-39 had the same
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in
group
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the group
a group
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under 15.The
age
group
from 40 to 46
hitting
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hit
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a high point
about
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of about
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+0.6%,
shows
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showing
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in
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that
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people
in
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of
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this
age
had the highest
population
of
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in
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new
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Zealand.
Furthermore
, the people
in
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aged
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age
65 and older had the lowest number
for
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in
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population
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the population
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,
however
,
table
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the table
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clearly shows
suddenly
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rieas
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rises
from 2011 to 2012.
A round
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of
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half the
population
of New Zealand
in
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is in
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age
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the age
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group
15 to 39 years old.
Then
became
after
this
the people in
age
40 to 64 years old.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age, group with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • age group
  • increase
  • decline
  • elderly population
  • aging population
  • working-age population
  • stable labor force
  • modest increase
  • significant change
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