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The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
#bar #student #enrolments #three #universities #summarise #information #features #comparison
The bar chart
depict
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depicts
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 the general student at 3
university
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universities
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.
University
 of Riverview has the biggest
namber
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number
 of
students
 .
Firstly
 , India has between 7000 and 8000
students
 at
University
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the University
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 of Riverview .
Secondly
, Nepal has 5000
students
 at it .
Moreover
 , 4000
students
 in Vietnam .
In addition
 , from 1000 to 2000 in Indonesia . Colombia has student
ander
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and
 1000 . India has 5000 at
Earlwood
University
 and 6000
on
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at
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 Smithtown
University
 .
Also
 , both
Earlwood
 and Smithtown
University
 have 4000
students
 in Nepal .
Beside
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to
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apply
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, Vietnam has 2000 at
University
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the University
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 of Smithtown and 3000 at
University
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the University
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 of
Earlwood
 . Indonesia has at both of these Universities 1000 .
Finally
 , there are 1000 at
University
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the University
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 of
Earlwood
 and below 1000 at other
University
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Universities
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.
To conclude
 , there are many universities around the world and
numbers
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the numbers
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 of people will be
diffrent
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different
 between the universities .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words university, students, earlwood with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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