The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the international student enrolments at three universities.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make a comparison where relevant.
The bar chart
depict
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the general student at 3
university
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universities
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.
University
of Riverview has the biggest
namber
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number
of
students
.
Firstly
, India has between 7000 and 8000
students
at
University
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the University
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of Riverview .
Secondly
, Nepal has 5000
students
at it .
Moreover
, 4000
students
in Vietnam .
In addition
, from 1000 to 2000 in Indonesia . Colombia has student
ander
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and
1000 . India has 5000 at
Earlwood
University
and 6000
on
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Smithtown
University
.
Also
, both
Earlwood
and Smithtown
University
have 4000
students
in Nepal .
Beside
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to
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apply
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, Vietnam has 2000 at
University
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the University
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of Smithtown and 3000 at
University
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the University
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of
Earlwood
. Indonesia has at both of these Universities 1000 .
Finally
, there are 1000 at
University
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the University
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of
Earlwood
and below 1000 at other
University
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Universities
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.
To conclude
, there are many universities around the world and
numbers
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the numbers
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of people will be
diffrent
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different
between the universities .
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words university, students, earlwood with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • enrolment trends
  • steady increase
  • fluctuating enrolments
  • international student numbers
  • comparative analysis
  • favored choice
  • global economic conditions
  • admission policies
  • program offerings
  • student satisfaction
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