You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » You should write at least 150 words.
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People in Australia
has used
Wrong verb form
use
used
many Verb problem
a lot
energy
throughout their household
. Fix the agreement mistake
households
These
Change the determiner
This energy
These energies
energy
that was used creates various problems. One of these problems are
the emission of Change the verb form
is
greenhouse
gasses
.
The average Australian household
use
most of their Correct subject-verb agreement
uses
energy
on their everyday appliances. Another high use
of energy
is water heating which uses 23% energy
. Change preposition
of energy
On the other hand
, heating and cooling uses
just 20% Change the verb form
use
energy
on Change preposition
of energy
a
Change the article
an
avarage
.
Correct your spelling
average
These usage
of Change the determiner
This usage
These usages
energy
creates one of the most
biggest problems, Change the adjective
apply
greenhouse
gasses
. The usage of water heating Correct your spelling
gases
produce
just 25% of the Change the verb form
produces
greenhouse
gasses
in an average Austalian
Correct your spelling
Australian
household
. Although
the energy
use
for heating and cooling is just 20%, the Replace the word
used
greenhouse
gasses
that was produces
by them Wrong verb form
are produced
is
about 38% on average.
In conclusion, everyone must learn to Correct subject-verb agreement
are
use
less energy
in their daily household
appliance. People must also
learn how to reuse energy
to lessen the greenhouse
gasses
that
is
being created. Change the verb form
are
Everone
must play their part to help the earth and all its glory.Correct your spelling
Everyone
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