You are advised to spend about 20 minutes on this task. The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. » You should write at least 150 words.

You are advised to spend about  20 minutes on this task.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

» You should write at least 150 words.
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These two charts give a comparison
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what
energy consuming
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household items
are use
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, and how much
greenhouse
gas
is produced from those items. from the first
chart
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we can see that "other appliances" are the most used, but from the second chart, it is a surprise to say that it is not the thing that produces the most
greenhouse
gas
, in fact, it's not even second. The category that produces the most
greenhouse
gas
in Australia is actually heating and cooling, even though it's only the third when it comes to consuming
energi
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energy
.
On the other hand
, the accumulative "other appliances" category uses the most
energy
but only comes third in producing
greenhouse
gas
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gases
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. From these two charts, we can conclude that the amount of
energy
consumed by a certain group of household
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doesn't always correspond to the
greenhouse
gas
produced by said group. We can see
this
by the fact that
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the chart,
it
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states that the thing that consumes the most
energy
doesn't produce the most
greenhouse
gas
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse, gas with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • average household
  • greenhouse gas emissions
  • energy use
  • percentage
  • chart
  • category
  • compare
  • disparity
  • proportion
  • corresponding
  • relative to
  • contribution
  • structured comparison
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