The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features
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The provided chart illustrates the distribution of citizens dwelling in the urban areas among four Asian nations between 1970 and 2020, with estimated
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for 2030 and 2040.
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,it was obvious that each country showed an upward tendency in the percentage
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total population
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Malaysia took the lead out of all districts, followed by Indonesia, Philippines and Indonesia respectively. To be more specific, beginning from 30%, there was a gradual growth of about 12% between 1970 and 1990,and after that,
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a significant jump took place during the
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from 1999 to 2040, eventually reaching approximately 82% in 2040.
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, the proportion of
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in
Philippines
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consistently fluctuated over the
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period
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from 1970 to 2010, and
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it moderately went up from 40% to 51%.
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1990
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a slight rise in the percentage of
Thailand
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population, increasing from around 19% to 29%, followed by a stable
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out at 30% during the
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30-year
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from 1990 to 2020,and
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a steady surge to 40% happened in the next two decades. In terms of Indonesia,
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starting
from around 12%, a continual boom through the whole
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, especially the percentage of
Indonesian
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Indonesians
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sharply skyrocketed to approximately 30% over the
period
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between 2020 and 2040.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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