The world of work is changing rapidly and employees cannot depend on having the same job or the same working conditions for life. Discuss the possible causes for this rapid change, and suggest ways of preparing people for the world of work in the future. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
In recent times, with the
rise
of technology, work is also
rapidly changing. With this
rapid change
, workers
cannot depend on their current jobs
or their working conditions. There are a few causes of change
and solutions for workers
to prepare for their future
.
The development of high-technological (hi-tech) machines and Artificial Intelligence (AI) have been one of the major causes of millions of people losing their jobs
. For example
, there have been a lot of newspaper publishers in the Philippines that have halted the production of newspapers due to
the rise
of online newspapers. Moreover
, with the rise
of online newspapers, it is seen as a more convenient and cost-efficient way of reading news, so newspaper publishing workers
would need to search for a new career to have a stable income. Another cause is that some of the jobs
have been transitioned from human interaction to fully automated jobs
. For example
, recently banks have increased their locations with ATMs so that more people can access and use their bank cards at any time of the day. This
has led to bank tellers needing to change
careers.
On the other hand
, there are plenty of solutions one can take to prepare for changing jobs
in the future
. Initially
, secondary students need to properly select a future
job that would be both financially substantial and rewarding that they want to do in the future
. For instance
, some university graduates cannot find an occupation in the field they've studied as the market has been saturated with workers
, so orientation when they are studying in high school is necessary.
In conclusion, there are varying causes and solutions to the rapid change
in work employment such
as the rise
of hi-tech machines and AI and the automation of jobs
. However
, workers
can prepare for changing jobs
if required by properly selecting a job while
in high school.Submitted by estillorericamae on
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task response
Your essay addresses the topic and provides relevant examples, which is great. However, to improve your task response score, consider discussing both causes and solutions in more depth. For example, further elaboration on how technology and AI specifically lead to job losses, and more varied solutions for preparing for the future of work.
coherence and cohesion
The logical structure of your essay is sound, but to achieve a higher score, ensure smoother transitions between points. For instance, explain how your examples are connected to the main idea of each paragraph, and use more linking words to enhance the flow.
coherence and cohesion
To make your essay more coherent, you might want to integrate your points better. For example, when discussing the rise of AI, directly follow up with a solution related to it, such as continuous professional education or skill development programs.
coherence and cohesion
The introduction clearly sets up the topic and the conclusion effectively summarizes your main points.
task response
The essay includes relevant and specific examples, such as the transition from newspapers to online media and the use of ATMs in banks, which strongly support your arguments.
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