The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.

The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
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The graph below illustrates the process of how rainwater is collected and
then
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processed for use as drinking
water
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in an Australian city. First of all, the
rain
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rainwater
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water
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is mined in deep pits underground and
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carried to the
water
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filter, one of the main stages of
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process and there are 4 steps.
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, it is carried along through the pipes in storage where it will be saved for a
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.
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, adding chemicals will be in the next steps. At the next stages of the process, harmful substances like carbon dioxide, mercury and sulfur are removed.
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, the liquid
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is transfer
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transfer
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to the
water
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treatment
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apply
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in
this
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phase drinking liquid will be purified and various chemicals will be added.
As a result
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, after going through all these processes when drinking
water
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is turned on, it will be ready for use.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rainwater harvesting
  • rooftops
  • drains and gutters
  • underground storage tanks
  • water treatment plant
  • purification
  • filtration
  • chemical treatment
  • impurities
  • microorganisms
  • distribution system
  • potable water
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