The diagram below shows how rainwater is collected for the use of drinking water in an Australian town.
The graph below illustrates the process of how rainwater is collected and
then
processed for use as drinking water
in an Australian city.
First of all, the rain
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rainwater
water
is mined in deep pits underground and then
carried to the water
filter, one of the main stages of this
process and there are 4 steps. Furthermore
, it is carried along through the pipes in storage where it will be saved for a while
.
Therefore
, adding chemicals will be in the next steps. At the next stages of the process, harmful substances like carbon dioxide, mercury and sulfur are removed. Subsequently
, the liquid Add a missing verb
is transfer
transfer
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treatment afterwards
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phase drinking liquid will be purified and various chemicals will be added.
As a result
, after going through all these processes when drinking water
is turned on, it will be ready for use.Submitted by dnm.best on
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