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The line graph shows a rise in homeless persons across England from 2010 to 2016.

The line graph shows a rise in homeless persons across England from 2010 to 2016.
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The given line graph demonstrates the increase in how many humans had no home in
England
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 during the given period of 6 years.
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, in central
England
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 homeless people's popularity escalated over the given period,
while
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 a significant rise can be seen in the Rest of
England
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 London.
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, unhoused people in
England
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 started with 1700 in 2010. And showed a considerable extent in it and reached a peak of 4300 in the year 2016.
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, the Rest of
England
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 started lower than
England
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 namely with 1400 in 2010 and until 2013, it stood relatively stable and gained its peak with 3200 in 2016.
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, London has the lowest number of people city beginning with 500 and upright relatively low until 2013 when it rose from 500 to 1000 in 2016.
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