You work at home a d have a problem with a piece of equipment that you use for your job. Write a letter to the shop or company which supplied the equipment in your lettee Describe the problem with the equipment Explain how this problem is affecting your work Say waht you want the shop or compny to do?

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
letter to express my disappointment with the use of a laptop that I bought from your store on August 1, 2024. The order number is Qwery.
Moreover
, when I bought the laptop it was in good condition
hence
, after
few
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a few
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days, I was not able to connect to the internet. It shows that there is no internet network but on other devices connection works very well. I checked the settings too,
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and unfortunately
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unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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I found that there is
issue
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with
this
device.
However
, I am a customer service representative who needs internet all the time to connect to calls but
due to
this
issue for the past couple of
days
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I am not able to attend any queries.
Additionally
, I got many warnings from my employer. If
this
obstacle
remain
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same
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the same
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for the upcoming days, I can
lost
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lose
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my job. To
reckon
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the issue, I would like to request
to
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that
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you
either
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apply
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repair
this
device if
its
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apply
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possible within one day
otherwise
I have no other option
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of
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returning. Hopefully, you will take prompt action to resolve the problem. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Waris Saroye
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Ensure that you provide specific details like the model of the laptop and more identifiable information for the order.
coherence cohesion
Work on improving your sentence structure and grammar for better clarity.
task achievement
You have clearly identified the problem with the equipment and how it affects your work.
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The letter maintains a polite and professional tone throughout.
coherence cohesion
The letter is well-structured with appropriate paragraphs and clear progression of ideas.
coherence cohesion
You included a greeting and a closing that fit the context of a formal letter.
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