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The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of forzen fish pie. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below give information about the manufacture of forzen fish pie. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided illustrations
shows
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 how the manufacture of frozen salmon cakes.
Overall
, there are 2 process diagrams which
has
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 a fish
pie’s
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pie
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 picture with ingredients,
meanwhile
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 the presentation below illustrates
man-made
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the man-made
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, linear process, which has 7 stages with a few raw materials. It starts with delivery and finishes with store and dispatch. The first presentation outlines
proportion
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the proportion
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 of components which contain peas, fish, potato and sauce in microwaveable
container
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containers
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. The second process diagram
about
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 a fish pie production line. First of all, a delivery machine
deliver
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a
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raw components
up
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 to one month. At
this
 point, potatoes are cleaned, peeled and sliced by equipment. Chips of vegetables are boiled until prepared. When it
cooked
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 should chill them and store for adding to
semi-ready
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 tart. Following that
,
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 delivered fresh salmon is mixed with lemon juice and salt.
Consequency
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Consequently
, spiced seafood is steamed oven and removed from
skin
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the skin
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 and bones. The next stages are inspecting and
joined
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 peas, gravy and ready potatoes. The final product
go
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 through
phase
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phases
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such
 as wrapping and freezing. From
this
, the iced food is packaged and dispatched.
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