The diagrams below show information about the manufacture of forzen fish pie. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagrams below show information about the manufacture of forzen fish pie. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons  where relevant.
The two process diagrams illustrate the production of the
fish
pie
and its components.
Overall
, they are two pictures, which consist of two man-made process diagrams. At
first,
the liner procedure starts
from
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delivering raw ingredients, like
potatoes
and fresh salmon, to the factory,
finishes
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and finishes
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with
store
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storing
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.
At
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Second
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second,
there is the filling and items of the
fish
pie
.
Pie
from
fish
begins production with
potatoes
and
the
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fresh salmon, which are delivered to the plant. After that,
potatoes
go through cleaning, peeling, slicing, boiling, chilling and storing stages , in order to add them into the
pie
. Fresh salmon,
also
passes through some steps for blending with
potatoes
and wrapping into the
fish
pie
to produce the final product
Fish
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The fish
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pie
consists of four items. They are peas,
fish
, sauce and
potatoes
. Three of them, peas,
fish
and sauce are mixed and poured into
microwaveable
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a microwaveable
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container. The top
are
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is
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covered with
potatoes
.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words fish, pie, potatoes with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "diagrams" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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