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The map displays the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words

The map displays the town of Stokeford in 1930 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words
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The presented two maps demonstrate the changes and development of the village of Stokeford over the period 1930 to 2010. The village of Stokeford had a huge development over the period of time. It has transformed from a small village to a developed better one.
It is clear that
,
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apply
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 there
is
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are
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 a lot of changes in
structure
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the structure
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 of
town
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the town
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. Farmlands and shops are destroyed,
instead
, new houses and roads appeared near the post office.
In addition
, some buildings changed their structure and purpose.
For instance
,
large
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a large
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houses
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house
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was alter
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was altered
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 to a retirement house,
meanwhile
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 a primary school was modernised and
adjust
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adjusted
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own
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its own
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 size and territory because of population
improving
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.
Moreover
, there are two constructions, which
has
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have
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 not
transformed
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been transformed
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 for 80 years.
For
example
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 a bridge, which
located
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is located
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 in
North
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the North
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 and the police office in the centre of
town
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the town
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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