IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 5.5

You are applying for a new job. Write a letter to a former supervisor asking for a reference. In your letter: Describe the job you are applying for Say why you are qualified for the job Explain why you want a reference from this person

#job #supervisor #reference #person
Dear Mr Johnson, I am writing
this
 letter to help me out by providing my name as
reference
Correct article usage
a reference
show examples
 for a new job I am applying for. I am applying for the position of Sr. programmer in Oracle. The opening is for
Java
Correct article usage
a Java
show examples
 developer with work experience of three years. It will be work from home role
initially
 for six
month
Change to a plural noun
months
show examples
 and later
on
Add a comma
on,
show examples
 they will change it to
hybrid
Add an article
a hybrid
the hybrid
show examples
 model.
Furthermore
, I am qualified for
role
Add an article
the role
show examples
 as my
qualification
Fix the agreement mistake
qualifications
show examples
met
Wrong verb form
meet
show examples
criteria
Correct article usage
the criteria
show examples
 for
this
 role. They are expecting engineering graduates with decent knowledge of Java and
oracle
Capitalize word
Oracle
show examples
database
Fix the agreement mistake
databases
show examples
. My skillsets are matching with their requirement.
Therefore
, they are asking for
reference
Fix the agreement mistake
references
show examples
 as a part of
interview
Add an article
the interview
show examples
 process so that
Correct article usage
the candidate
show examples
candidate
Change noun form
candidate's
show examples
 potential can be judged based on his previous employment history. As you always said good things about my performance during appraisal time to senior management,
so
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
I am requesting you to do
favour
Correct article usage
a favour
show examples
this
 time. I hope
your
Change the pronoun
you
show examples
 will not disappoint me. Yours sincerely, Jay Mcgill
Submitted by yash334 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

task achievement
Ensure to check and correct minor grammatical errors (e.g., 'help me out by providing my name as reference' should be 'help me out by providing a reference for me').
task achievement
Clarify and expand some points for a more thorough response (e.g., provide more detail about your qualifications and what specifically makes you suited for the Java developer role).
coherence cohesion
Organize your paragraphs more clearly to focus on single ideas, such as qualifications, job description, and reason for reference. This will improve readability and coherence.
greeting and closing
The letter has a clear and polite greeting and closing.
complete response
The main points are addressed, showing your intent and reasons for the request.
suitable writing tone
Your tone is formal and appropriate for a professional context.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: