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Band 4.5

the most important aim of science be improve people lives to what extend agree or disagree

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 of people better. The new scientist
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science
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 it more easy and helpful.
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 accomplished many things not only in the human
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lives
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 many mystery only can discovered by
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scientists.
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science
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anather
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 many people do not know about.In
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chemistry
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chemical
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 in our life. In conclusion, I agree the important to have a
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coherence cohesion
The essay would benefit from a clearer and more focused thesis statement in the introduction to set the stage for the argument.
coherence cohesion
Make sure the ideas in each paragraph follow a logical order and connect more smoothly. Transitions between paragraphs and within the paragraphs can help with this.
task achievement
Expanding on ideas and providing more details could enhance clarity and comprehensiveness. Try to elaborate more on the points mentioned, providing specific examples where possible.
task achievement
Polishing language and grammar will enhance readability and make the essay more professional. Consider reviewing subject-verb agreement, verb tense consistency, and sentence structure.
coherence cohesion
The essay touches on several important aspects of how science improves lives, demonstrating an understanding of the topic.
task achievement
The ideas presented are relevant to the question and reflect a good attempt to cover different facets of the impact of science.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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