The diagram below shows a possible future means of home energy production. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows a possible future means of home energy production.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the demographic information about the procedure of the utilisation of home
energy
.
Overall
, it can be observed that there are 7 stages in the method, from the fermentation of methane to the distribution of
energy
to houses. In the first stage, leftover food and dried leaves are gathered in a steel tank, filling it almost to the brim. The end result of
this
step would produce methane gas, which
subsequently
will be flowed through pipes to keep it in a specialised storage. Methane gas will proceed to the next stage of the production technique. Diving deeper, the gas would go through several machines, starting with a compressor and followed by a combustion engine to remove any impurities;
hence
, producing mechanical
energy
.
Finally
, a generator will be used to convert mechanical
energy
to electrical
energy
that is
stored in a battery. When it is ready to be utilised, the electrical source will be supplied to residential areas nearby.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words energy with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • renewable energy
  • sustainability
  • solar panels
  • energy storage
  • wind turbine
  • geothermal
  • energy efficiency
  • carbon footprint
  • grid
  • biomass
  • photovoltaic
  • smart meter
  • energy consumption
  • insulation
  • heat pump
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