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The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph and table below give information about water use worldwide and water consumption in two different countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the global
water
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use
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 by sector over a century from 1999 to 2000. The table depicts the waiter consumption in
Brazil
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 and the democratic republic of Congo in the year 2000.
Overall
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, there are three different categories in the line graph, respectively agriculture, industrial, and domestic
use
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.
Moreover
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, the item of agriculture represented the highest global
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use
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 during
this
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 period. As for the table, all options for
Brazil
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( containing population, irrigated land, and the area of
water
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 consumption) were higher than that of Congo in 2000.
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 with, agriculture showed a significant discrepancy compared with the other two items, which approximately contained 500 kin in 1900,
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 gradually increased by 3,000 km3 until 2000.
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, the
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use
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 of the domestic
use
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 presented the lowest km3, rising 500 km3 from 0 km3 over the period between 1900 to 2000. Looking at the below table in detail, the irrigated region showed the most prominent distinction between
Brazil
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 and Congo, respectively 26,500 and 100 km2.
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, the
water
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 consumption illustrated the least difference in 2000, which contained 359 km3 in
Brazil
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 and 8 km3 in Conge.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, brazil, km with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 2 times.
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