The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.

The graph below gives information on the numbers of participants for different activities at one social centre in Melbourne, Australia for the period 2000 to 2020.
Contained in the given line graph is data related to 5 extracurricular
activities
which were participated in a specific centre located in Melbourne, Australia between 2000 and 2020.
Overall
, it is clearly perceived that the
number
of
participants
in all the
activities
saw an increase or no changes,
whereas
Amateur dramatics was the only exception in which the
participants
in
this
activity decreased throughout the period.
Additionally
, even though table tennis had a surge in the
number
of people who joined in, it was still less than the film club ‘s
participants
. With regards to the
activities
which witnessed a growth in the
number
of
participants
,
while
table tennis started at 18 in 2000, musical performances were just established in 2005. As for the people who take part in table tennis, before having a dramatic rise from 20 to double it amounted to approximately 55
participants
between 2010 and 2020 and exceeding the
participants
in not just amateur dramatics but
also
martial arts, throughout the first ten years it only remained steady which ranging from 18 and 20. Meanwhile, the
number
of
participants
in musical performances rose gradually from 0 to over 18 people in the given timeframe. Turning toward the remaining
activities
that did not change at all, film club
along with
martial arts stood at about 63
as well as
48 in 2000, respectively. For the first 5 years, both
participants
in the two mentioned
activities
saw a small decline to 61 and 31 in order,
while
from 2005 to the next ten years, it experienced a contradictory pattern , but they soon both saw a rise in the 2020 and end at the same amount from the start. In terms of the only activity which witnessed a fall, it had a small increase from 2000 to 2005 from approximately 26 to 29 before experiencing a dive to under 9
participants
, which was nearly 3 times less than in 2020.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • participants
  • social centre
  • comparison
  • trends
  • consistently popular
  • gained popularity
  • lost popularity
  • community interest
  • availability of facilities
  • social factors
  • economic factors
  • external events
  • economic downturns
  • health crises
  • demographic changes
  • aging population
  • marketing
  • community outreach programs
  • participation rates
  • Melbourne
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