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The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida

The table shows data about the average income for one person in dollars, across two different age groups: under 18 and over 60, as well as the percentage of the poor population in three states in the US, namely California, Utah, and Florida
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The given table illustrates the average income per person in US dollars, across ages under 18 and over 60, with the proportion of low-income
population
 in
California
,
Utah
, and
Florida
. From an
overall
 perspective, it can be seen that
California
 has the highest salaries per person compared to other states.
Moreover
,
Utah
 has the lowest percentage of people aged over 60 and below the poverty line,
while
 a portion of those aged below 18 is the highest.
To begin
 with, the rate of the
population
 under the age of 18 in
California
,
Utah
, and
Florida
 was 17%, 28%, and 16%, respectively.
On the other hand
, the percentage of elderly people aged over 60 in
Florida
 was the largest
according to
 other states at 23% followed by 13% in
Utah
 and the lowest was 8% in
California
.
Furthermore
, the rates of
population
 finances under the poverty line were vastly in
California
 with 16% of the
population
.
Nonetheless
, the average money earned per person was 23000, 22000, and 17000 in dollars in
California
,
Florida
, and
Utah
 in the following orders.
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