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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in sir cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in sir cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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, I would like to start with the oldest underground railway which is London , it was opened in 1863 and has the fastest kilometres of
route
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 of all cities with a
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 of 394 and the second highest number of passengers 775.
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, Paris opened in 1900
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 the second highest kilometres of
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route
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 Paris
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 was 199 and the
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second-highest
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 highest of passengers of all cities was 1191 million which is quite amazing for only the first year of opening. Next up is Tokyo, the city of technology first opened in 1927 the
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 was 155
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, you may think everything is normal about Tokyo well not really Tokyo has the highest passengers number and ironically the same number as the opening year which is 1927 but in millions.
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, Washington DC in the great country USA year opening was back in 1976 which is still new not as old as the cities we talked about and nothing really new or worth mentioning .
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words route with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • underground railway system
  • route length
  • annual passengers
  • opening date
  • established
  • network
  • passenger numbers
  • comparison
  • geographical location
  • urban transit
  • infrastructure
  • length of the route
  • serve
  • capacity
  • system expansion
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