You recently stayed at a hotel for a conference with your company and there were several problems with your room Write to the hotel management to complain. Include • where you stayed • what the problems were • how they can fix your complaints
Dear Sir or Madam
I'm Ravshanova Mushtariy and I'm writing in order to complain about the
hotel
which I stayed at yesterday.I had a conference with my company so I needed to stay at the hotel
.They recommended yours because the hotel
you own is five-star.
At first
everything went really well, Add a comma
first,
however
all disappointment started after I wanted to take a shower.First of all the water was really cold and there was no hot water.Second of Add a comma
however,
all
I wasn't supplied with shampoo.That was Add a comma
all,
such
a dissatisfaction.It's not that acceptable it's because not only I paid
Wrong verb form
pay
lot's
of money but Change noun form
lots
also
it's five
Correct determiner usage
a
star
Correct your spelling
five-star
hotel
.
I'm feeling a dissatisfaction
Replace the word
dissatisfied
therefore
, the breakfast was awful.First of all,the bread was a bit stale and also
it had an awful smell.To make matters worse the serve was really late.
After that another problem occurred.There was something wrong with the air conditioner,therefore
I called the hotel
manager to solve this
problem however
I didn't receive any help.So I ended up sleeping without air
conditioner and I think that that's even more unacceptable.Correct article usage
an air
However
I will be staying at Add a comma
However,
this
hotel
till next week so I would appreciate it if you could change my room.I look forward to hearing from you
Yours faithfully
Ravshanova MushtariySubmitted by omondavlat91 on
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coherence cohesion
Try to ensure that each paragraph covers one specific idea or issue to improve clarity and coherence.
task achievement
Consider using a more formal tone consistently throughout the letter, especially when addressing serious issues.
task achievement
The letter provides a detailed description of the problems encountered during the stay, enhancing the completeness of the response.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing of the letter are appropriate and courteous.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite