You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter •say why she would not enjoy going to college •explain why getting a job is a good idea for her •suggest types of job that would be suitable for her
Letter
Dear Diyora,
I am writing to give you
advise
about choosing a Replace the word
advice
college
or working.
I would really appreciate it if you called tell
me why do not Add the particle
to tell
won't
to go to Correct your spelling
want
college
. You can not get a place university
if you do not finish Change preposition
at university
college
or you won't get a good job. I would be grateful if you choose
Wrong verb form
chose
college
however
getting a job is a good idea for you because you earn money. You are eldest
child in your family that's why you must help your parents Change the article
the eldest
for
earn money Change preposition
apply
however
everybody must study and get a place Change preposition
at an
an
university. I hope you make the right decision the reason you do not want to go to Correct article usage
a
college
is because you don't get along well with your teammates. It is not good for you drop
out of Add the particle
to drop
college
because of your group mates. I suggest that you become an english
teacher because you like Change the capitalization
English
english
and you have good Change the capitalization
English
realitionship
with students. You will with your good work and earn money. I would be grateful if you Correct your spelling
relationship
relationships
choose
Wrong verb form
chose
college
. I am looking forward to hearing from you.
Your
sincerely,
RayhonaCorrect the word
Yours
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Grammar
The letter contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrasing, such as 'advise about choosing a college or working' and 'call tell me why do not won't to go to college.' It's important to proofread your work to ensure clarity and correctness.
Structure
Separate each main idea into distinct paragraphs. For instance, use one paragraph to discuss why college might not be enjoyable, another to explain the benefits of getting a job, and a third to suggest suitable job types.
Tone
Try to maintain a consistent and polite tone throughout the letter, ensuring that your advice comes across as respectful and supportive. Avoid repetition, like 'I would be grateful if you choose college' which is repeated multiple times.
Content
The letter provides several good reasons for your recommendations, demonstrating a thoughtful response to your friend's dilemma.
Politeness
The closing statement 'I am looking forward to hearing from you' is a polite and appropriate way to end the letter.
Structure your letter
A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:
- A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
- The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
- A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)
When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.
All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.