The line graph below gives information on cinema attendance in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph illustrates the data about the attendance in the cinema of
the
Great Britain.
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Overall
, it is clear that
the top-ranked age group is between 44-54, meanwhile, the people aged 14-24 were at least,as they showed the lowest result. In addition
,each category had a significant drop in 2000, and there were a
dramatic increases in 2005.
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Firstly
, in 1990, aged
33-34 and 44-54 had equal results by demonstrating 37%, Correct pronoun usage
those aged
however
, the population which were at their
44-54 had a noticeable growth to 40%, in the meantime,the category aged 34-44 went up slightly to 38%. Correct pronoun usage
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Hence
, in 2010, aged 44-54 had a huge rise to 51%, meanwhile, the second group had a steady growth.
Secondly
, in 2000, the people
aged 24-34 went down dramatically to 25%, when previously it had approximately 29%. Correct quantifier usage
number of people
Also
, in 2005,the youngstres
who were aged 14-24 went up noticeably to 20%, Correct your spelling
youngsters
youngster
however
, it had a sharp decline by 15%, in 2000.Submitted by akzharkynzhamal on
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