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The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The graph below shows population figures for India and China since the year 2000 and predicted population growth up until 2050. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph depicts information about the number of
Indian's
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Indian
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 and
Chinese
 people,
also
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as well as
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 the predicted population growth during a 50-year period, from 2000 to 2050.
Overall
, what stands out from
graph
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the graph
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 is that
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Indian
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Indian
's people
shows
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show
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 an upward trend,
while
chinese
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Chinese
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 people
has
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 a downward trend. Regarding
Chinese
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the Chinese
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 population, despite starting
around
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 1.2
billions
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billion
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 in 2000,
this
 figure increased sharply, reaching nearly 1.5
billions
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billion
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 in the middle of 2020.
Following
this
, there is a
slightly
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slight
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 decrease in the number of
Chinese
 citizens, with 1.4
billions
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billion
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in
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at
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 the end of the period. In terms of
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the Indian's
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Indian's
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Indian
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 population,it can be seen clearly from the graph
is
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apply
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that the trend of
Indian's
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Indian
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 citizens shows a continuous increase throughout the period, starting at 1.0
billions
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billion
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 and ending
by1.6
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at by1.6
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billions
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billion
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words indian, chinese, billions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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