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In many countries people have to go away from their family and friends to find the work. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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In
this
 contemporary era, people are migrating to other nations and places in search of jobs.
This
 trend is followed mostly in underdeveloped countries, where getting
desired
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 job is not a cup of tea for everyone. Nowadays, it has become a school of debate, where some believe
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 advantageous for people,
while
 others oppose
this
 issue. In my school of thought, it has more benefits than demerits. I will explicate my points in forthcoming paragraphs. To commence with, it is irrefutable that
its
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 hard to leave family and friends, yet forks prefer to move to
another countries
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another country
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 for
their
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better career opportunities. There are
myraids
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myriads
myriad
 of benefits of it, where first and foremost and the most significant is having dream job with good salary packages and remuneration.
Secondly
, a person can
fulfill
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 all the dreams of his family meanwhile. To quote an example, it is usually seen that youngsters are changing the scenario of their
middle class
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 families by fulfilling their
parents
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 dreams and giving them a luxurious
lifesytle
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lifestyle
.
This
 is the result of doing jobs in developed nations and cities.
On the other hand
, meanwhile, it has some disadvantages. Living alone, without near and dears makes the person depressed sometimes.
While residing
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at
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 other places takes the person
on
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the
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 stage of loneliness,
that
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 leads to dangerous mental problems.
To conclude
, it
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