The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

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of males and females of various ages from Australia who exercise regularly in the year 2010. The unit is measured in percentage.

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, males above the

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of 25 were predominantly more engaged in physical exercise as compared to

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females.

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, it is

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for those below 25

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where

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females

are exercising

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regularly. In the beginning, from the

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of 15 to 44, there is an exponential growth from 48% to 53% in the

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of men actively involved in regular

workout

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workouts

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but,

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, women showed a drop from 53% to 40% for the same. In the

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group of 35 and above though, before dropping to 46%, the numbers remain stable at 53% for men in the

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group of 45-64. But, for women

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there was a rise in the number from 40% to 55% in the year 2010.